This is Just to Say (Jupiter’s Version)

I have eaten
the comets
that were in
my orbit

and which
you were probably
for YOUR orbit

Forgive me
they were delicious
so crunchy
and so cold.

. . .with apologies to William Carlos Williams

  1. That is a really funny twist – the original poem is one of my favorites. Bugeja used it to illustrate the power of line lengths in poetry, and that lesson always stuck with me. I can’t help but wonder what the other planets might have to say in response. Welcome to ye blog-o-sphere; I wish you much happy astro-poetry!
    One Writer’s Mind

    • Glad you enjoyed the poem! I like Williams’ original, too, and I couldn’t resist putting my own spin after watching the footage of Jupiter munching up Comet Shoemaker-Levy. My next task is to pay homage to Wallace Stevens’ jar with a poem about Voyager. And after that, I want to take a stab at a “renga,” a collaborative form of haiku where one writer provides a few lines and others complete the verse. I enjoyed reading your blog last night, and I’m now following it. Thanks again for your comments and the retweet! All the best to you.

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